A few months ago we started learning how to write essays, we started with the basics like the body of the essay starting with an intro, thesis, body paragraph 1,2 and 3 and conclusion. Leading up to the essay we had to start learning about fallacies which is basically a mistake in people’s writing or unreliable sources.

Usually when you wright an essay you are given 40 minutes, 10 to prepare, 20 to write and 10 to revise and edit but this time we where given a few days in advance to prepare. Although we had a few days to prepare we couldn’t write anything in advance, if we did we would get a zero on the assignment.

There where two questions that we could have answered in our essay, the first one being How does Carroll create a real imaginary world for his reader? And the second one being, How are readers/viewers drawn to imaginary worlds? I chose the first one and used three examples, one for each body paragraph, here are the notes I took to prepare:

The day of the essay we got 40 minutes to write it, i think the one thing I could improve on is managing my time wisely. In the end I got everything done but the conclusion, and i didn’t have enough time to edit anything. Here is my first draft:

Usually we don’t get to revise our essays, but this time the teacher let us. I finished the conclusion and fixed some mistakes, then added some quotes from the book Alice and Wonderland. Here’s my final copy and the teachers notes:

I think that I have a lot of improving to do in my writing, like run on sentences, and grammar mistakes, but besides that I think I can really improve with some more practice!